to much ‘and then i, and then i, and then i’. XXX to much ‘and then i, and then i, and then i’. you need some character reaction and mindset to make it interesting, not just a series of actions linked by ‘ands’ and commas.READERReport 2004-06-23 19:57:24CAPS ya damn idiot«12» to much ‘and then i, and then i, and then i’. to much ‘and then i, and then i, and then i’. i hear a rewrite in the worksREADERReport 2007-01-09 23:07:07Don’t bother woth [art 3READERReport 2004-08-10 18:16:57all caps are offensive. 7 comments«12»misterjediReport 2021-01-04 21:03:59Don’t bother with chapter three, you bring the Arnold name into disrepute.READERReport 2007-10-07 00:02:31Not so great and all caps really suck ass. you need some character reaction and mindset to make it interesting, not just a series of actions linked by ‘ands’ and commas.READERReport 2004-06-23 19:57:24CAPS ya damn idiot«12»
